FanFiction Fridays – Guest Review Week Nov 25/11

This week we are going to enjoy something new on Fan Fiction Fridays here at Rob Attack. It’s an idea I’ve been pondering in my mind for a while now and decided to try it out this week. I thought it would be a nice change if, from time to time, we had a Guest Review Week where I would invite one of our RA readers or a fellow Fan Fiction friend to write a literary review/rec that they felt was worthwhile reading and recommending. Also, when we do have a Guest Review Week the whole post will be dedicated only to our Guest Reviewer, so we can focus solely on their chosen Fan Fiction story. I hope you will enjoy this change of pace and please feel free to offer feedback on this idea for future posts.

Our first Guest Reviewer will be the lovely Cared. So please sit back and enjoy her wonderful rec for this week….

My good friends ilovealion and georgiaedwardlover, the talented duo that they are, collaborate as georgialion to bring us this amazing story – Pure Revelations. georgiaedwardlover writes Bella’s POV, while ilovealion writes Edward’s POV.  I love to get inside the head of both Edward and Bella, and in Pure Revelations, I get to do just that.

*Click Banner to experience as a gif with a changing colourful background*

I really should ask the girls why they labeled Pure Revelations Romance/Suspense.  There is romance, yes, there is suspense, yes, but there is also drama, intrigue, mystery, friendship, UST, and humour.  The comic relief is very kindly and unwittingly provided by Edward’s internal dialogue that he carries on with the part of his anatomy known as The Python.  One of The Python’s many talents is his conversational skill, he appears to have a mind of his own and even poor Edward refers to him in the third person as the delinquent in his pants.  As ilovealion writes the EPOV, she also writes the PPOV, and she holds him close to her heart so she was traumatized when she saw this picture here recently LOL.

Set mainly in Seattle, the majority of our favourite characters live in the secretive and exclusive community of LaVerrot Estates. The residents follow a lifestyle that includes following a special diet and exercise, use of the specially provided VI range of products and vitamins, the teenagers have all taken a vow of celibacy.  From the outside it appears ideal, but it doesn’t take long to realize that all is not as it seems behind the gated walls.

Bella transfers from a College in Arizona, and arrives in Washington, an insecure and shy girl. She immediately has to endure a very rocky start to her new life, but somehow despite many unfortunate circumstances, she grows in confidence and maturity. In fact we even see her get to blossom in response to first love.

This Edward is one that is very easy to fall in love with. He is kind and loving, he is clever with an inquisitive mind and it seems he is no longer prepared to accept, without question, the lifestyle that he has been living. He looks to have it all yet something is missing in his life.

Edward and Bella have many things seemingly standing in the way of their relationship, not the least of which is a dark and disturbing secret from Bella’s past that comes back to haunt both her sleeping and waking thoughts.  Will their love be strong enough to survive?

There are some really creepy, slimy individuals involved in the leadership in the community and it’s sister communities.  The worse of them, Ben Cheney, aka Dick Head, makes my skin crawl; his influence seems to know no bounds.  He is a completely insane control freak, a truly scary character.  Is every move monitored and recorded, perhaps even in the shower, or is it merely paranoia?

I have to confess that I love to hate Tanya in fanfiction.  The Tanya in Pure Revelations is manipulative, clingy, needy, conniving, tarty, tacky and totally unstable – or so I thought.  Last Thursday we were given the treat of a Tanya POV; I think I may need to eat humble pie, as I suspect that I have been wrong about her, or am I?   Like me, Edward doesn’t know who to trust in LaVerrot, and I’m afraid that thrusting er trusting the wrong individuals could prove disastrous!

Two of my favourite things about this story are the many delightful nods to canon and also the equally enjoyable very clever twists on canon.  This story has reached 61 chapters, yet it still keeps me intrigued and wanting more.  It updates with two chapters every second Thursday, one chapter from BPOV and one from EPOV.

I hope you will join with Edward in his investigation of the mysteries of LaVerrot.

Excerpt from Chapter 3:

“I look up to follow her gaze to the stairs and see a sight that makes my retinas burn. Lauren’s wearing what looks like a tube top over her round and flabby ass. Nasty.

“Lauren is a complete whore,” Jasper says flatly. “I don’t even know how…”

The words around me start to fade as I focus in on the beauty walking behind the troll named Lauren.

She’s a vision, with long shiny hair the color of forbidden dark chocolate and a stunning face with just a hint of color, like she’s blushing. She watches her feet as she slowly climbs the stairs. Her arms are folded over her ample chest and holding several books, a lemonade, and an apple. She has her lower lip pulled in between her teeth as she timidly follows Lauren and Jessica to a table. As the troll and slut plop down and spread out enough food for five people, the brown-headed goddess sits down carefully in her chair. She allows her hair to drape over one side, shielding her face from her tablemates, but not from me. I’m captivated by the flawless, fair skin that covers her delicate features. It looks silky, touchable…kissable.

I don’t know what it is about this girl, but I’m having trouble pulling my eyes away from her form. As the girls next to her talk continuously, she pulls out a text book and sips on her lemonade. I watch the liquid flow across her pouty lips and imagine how soft they must feel. What I wouldn’t give to…

“Hello, Earth to Edward,” I barely hear as I’m slowly drawn away from her and out of my stupor.

As I turn to reconnect with my tablemates, I realize that every eye is on me. They look stunned or pissed or something.

How long have I been watching her?

Emmett says, “What the hell, man? You were in some kind of voodoo trance.”

Emmett? When did Emmett get here?

“You were staring at the hobgoblin and her sidekicks,” Jasper laughs.

Why is Jasper laughing at me?

“Were you entranced by the fat ass, the skinny legs, or the big nose? I mean, seriously dude, I’ve never seen you all slack jawed and drooling like that.”

Wait, was I really drooling?

I wipe my mouth to check…What a dumb ass move. Jasper and Emmett start howling with laughter at my still dazed form. Jasper actually falls to the floor because he’s shaking so hard.

I should be pissed, but I can’t do anything but sit and stare at them. Rosalie looks at me like I’ve grown a second head and says, “Edward, I don’t know what that was all about, but you better not start bringing Lauren or her skanky friends around. I will inform Esme of your poor taste in girls, and she will not be pleased.”

Geez, back off Rose…I was just looking at –Okay, ogling a girl.

As Emmett and Jasper regain their composure, I start to gather my uneaten food. Alice and I have to head back to the Cullen Compound because we have some “community service” to complete this afternoon. Jasper has an afternoon class, so he will have to catch a ride home with Rosalie.

As Alice and I stand to leave, I realize that we will have to pass by her table to get to the stairs. I can feel my palms start to sweat.

Why am I nervous?

I walk close by Alice’s side as we make our way to the stairway. I try to keep my eyes off of the demure beauty that captured my attention, but I fail. I chance one peek at her enchanting form as we pass her table. She is exquisite. That brief glimpse is not enough to sate my fascination with her, but it will have to do for now.

I glance over at Alice, who is uncharacteristically quiet. She is grinning at me with a giddy expression; she winks at me and nods her head ever so slightly. I realize that she has identified the object of my desire and approves. She knows me too well.”

Summary for Pure Revelations.: “E & B share a class at UDub, but not much else. She’s shy & reserved as she adjusts to a new life. He’s angry & isolated because of his upbringing in the mysterious and secretive LaVerrot Estates. Fate brings them together, but will their love be allowed?

Twilight – Rated: M – English – Romance/Suspense – Chapters: 61 – Words: 408,668 – Reviews: 1690 – Updated: 11-17-11 – Published: 1-30-11 – Edward & Bella”  



I would like to say a heartfelt thank you to Cared for accepting my invitation to be our first Fan Fiction Fridays Guest Reviewer, it was an honour to have her join us and provide us with such a wonderfully presented rec.

I hope you enjoyed this first edition of FFF Guest Review Week and please share what’s been owing you in the FanFiction world this week. MC


Filed under Edward A M Cullen, Fan Fiction Friday, Fan Fiction Friday Guest Review, Fan Fiction Recs, FFF Library, Twilight, Writing

30 responses to “FanFiction Fridays – Guest Review Week Nov 25/11

  1. Thanks MC, I’m delighted and honoured to be asked. I couldn’t have picked a better time to recommend Pure Revelations. This is the perfect moment to immerse yourself in that intriguing world as interesting revelations and discoveries are being made in each new chapter.

    The talented Melee03 made the gorgeous Banner and the Blinkie.

    I’m still reading Actorwards but this week I also read one of the Drabble rec’s I found here recently. Drowning, not waving by Bower-of-Bliss. It was one of the funniest stories that I have read for a long time. I’ll say that sales of home waxing kits have fallen dramatically since that story posted, and I’ll say no more on the subject LOL.

    • ilovealion

      You are a sneaky, sneaky woman!!! I can’t believe you kept this secret from me 🙂 I told you that I would be MIA while I’m visitng the fam in the middle of nowhere– it’s by pure chance that I checked RA!!!

      I’ve been taking pics of peach orchards and Southern mansions–so my SIL wanted to know why. When i pulled up RA to show her your blinkie (and to tell her that her home town was the setting for a new Twific) I had to do a triple take. She was quite impressed that PR was the subject, but I skimmed over the review while she was standing beside me. She questioned me about the python in the pants pic, though. I had to blush and say it was a joke because my extended family has NO CLUE that I am such a pervy woman. hehehe

      Anyway– thank you so much for your kind words, support, and friendship. June can’t get here soon enough! I can’t wait to meet you in person and give you a big ole hug and kiss.

      I love ya, sweets!!


      • So the cat is out of the bag, or should I say the python is out of the pants regarding your families knowledge of your pervy mind. Sorry about that – not really LMAO.

      • BUSTED!!! LOL Hope all goes well and the python isn’t exposed to the wrong people LMAO That would be a real shame. 😛

        Curious to know what your SIL Thought of the blinkie Cared made. has she read your story at all?

        Thanks for all the work you are putting into ARWD!! You are both amazing Ladies and great friends.

        • ilovealion

          I was busted!! But, no worries.

          They have not read my story. I’m really not promoting it to my family for obvious reasons. LMAO

          She was very excited about the blinkie and the new story that you guys are working on. I’ll keep her posted. My MIL actually went with me to get the peach orchard pictures.

          I think you are going to be very happy with the houses I picked. One of them actually has a cemetary in the side yard with a wall. very creepy… but beautiful as well. I’ll get them downloaded and sent to you guys next week.

          Thanks for promoting PR!! *squee*

    • Thank you Cared, you did a superb job! xo I am so excited you are enjoying Drowning, not Waving! I absolutely love it too, & yes it is one of the funniest fics I have read. So excellent, so glad I could rec something new for you. xo

    • MC, This is a great idea. Anyone who really Loves a fic and wants to promote it should contact MC at Or contact me at the same address if you want to write a Rob post or have any ideas for a post you would like to see.

      Cared, you write a great review BB. I know how much you love this story and I intend to finish reading it.The chapters I read were awesome and intriguing. You can’t not read this fic. If you are ending a fic soon I highly suggest moving PR to the top of your list!!!
      Cared, Feel free to write a post for us anytime BB!

  2. This story has been on my WIP list for a long time. I’m just waiting for it to be completed.

    Thanks for the insight into the story. 🙂

    By the grace of God, my dear friend Smittenkitten, mentioned that a story I had long since forgotten, had recently be completed. Vampire in the Basement by michellephnats.
    It had been over a year since I had read the story, but remembered it fondly. Definitely more of a rated T story, but the storyline is very unique and still recommend it.

    • ilovealion

      I’m honored that PR is on your TBR list. We hope to have it completed by Jan or Feb of next year. We look forward to hearing from you when it’s complete. 🙂

    • It’s good to know that VitB completed thanks. It has been so long since I looked at it that I think I will need to go back to the start again.

  3. newyorkkisses

    Hi ladies!
    Thank you, Cared, for this great review of “Pure Revelations”. I, too, have had this on my TBR-list for ages and am waiting for it to complete. Your review made me want to read it that much more. 🙂

    Katiebirdie, I too couldn’t believe it when I heard that The Vampire in the Basement” completed. I loved that fic so much back then, because it was so unique, and I can’t wait to read the whole thing after I have finished CW&IA.
    And I agree, don’t let the T-rating stop you, ladies, this is a must-read!

    Last night, as I was checking my TBR-list for fics that had recently completed, I came across a new fic by Savage (anything she writes is a must-read, IMO) and even better, it had a Savageward! You all know how much I loved “Beautiful Savage” by readingmama (, so I just had to start it, even if it’s a WIP. It’s called “Transcendence”.
    Ehd doesn’t know how the woman ended up in his pit trap, he just knows he wants to protect her and provide for her in any way he can. She sure does make a lot of noises with her mouth, though. Caveward is born!
    Twilight – Rated: M – English – Hurt/Comfort/Romance – Chapters: 5 – Words: 7,865 – Reviews: 1077 – Updated: 11-24-11 – Published: 11-21-11 – Edward & Bella

    Can’t wait to see where this is going, poor Edward has no idea why Bella doesn’t want to play house with him, lol, poor bb. 😉

    Have a great weekend, ladies!

  4. I’m so proud to call Cared, ilovealion and georgiaedwardlover friends. Cared – your review is excellent; and as for the 2 PR authors, you know how much fun I have reading your super story. I love you guys to pieces.

    I have hardly had time to read anything lately, but I want to share my love of this fresh, light and different hidden gem by Mamabean30. Please read Speaking in Code:
    Summary: Edward Cullen’s trash is his neighbors’ torture, and now his house is in violation of Chapter 36 of the Seattle Municipal Code. When Inspector Swan shows up to issue a citation, sparks will fly! ExB, AH

    • ilovealion

      I’m proud to call you my friend, too. I don’t know about you, but I can’t wait until we get to meet face-to-face in Vegas!!!

      I appreciate your continued support of georgialion and our story. Because you are an author, you know how important-vital really-it is to have readers who encourage you along the way. You and Cared are the voices I need to keep my fingers typing out EPOV.

      Thanks so much for your kind words and friendship!

      I love ya, sweets!

      • Cared is the most supportive, encouraging and most involved reader a writer could ask for. She is truly pricless! Most people would never have even noticed my fics if it weren’t for cared’s love of them and constant promoting of them. Getting to know her has been a real pleasure and I am proud to call her my friend. She deserves an award for all that she does for our stories! We love ya girlfriend!

    • gingerandgreen Speaking In Code sounds good thanks. I’ll have to move it up to the top of the list as I always particularly enjoy the fics you rec.

  5. miniaturemom12

    Good job Cared. I’m adding/ downloading as usual.
    I’ve started another sleep-neglecting story this week. It’s very dramatic and well written. There’s a lot going on and it’s hella-angtsy but the chapters are information packed yet steadily progressive, so you don’t feel bogged down.

    More To Love Than This
    Using her best friends offer of marriage to escape a bad situation at home Bella hopes she’s finally landed on her feet but she’s just swapped one bully for another and this one wants her,and her baby, to pay for his broken heart. Love, loss,sacrifice.AH
    Twilight – Rated: M – English – Angst/Romance – Chapters: 54 – Words: 462,595 – Reviews: 1323 – Updated: 9-17-11 – Published: 3-6-11 – Edward & Bella – Complete

    • ilovealion

      Thanks so much for adding PR to your TBR list. I hope you enjoy it. We have truly put our hearts and souls into this story, so happy reading!

  6. ilovealion


    I was completely surprised to see this post today! I’m actually in Cochran, GA (the setting for RobsFan~tasy and Rita’s new fic A Rendezvous With Death) and I pulled up this site to show my sister-in-law the blinkie that Cared made for the story. Imagine my excitement to see Pure Revelations as the featured story! (Cared… you sneaky woman, you)

    Just wow!

    First of all, thanks Cared for such a wonderful review and rec for our story. As you know, it is truly a labor of love for me and georgiaedwardlover. You have been such a loyal supporter of PR and I am truly grateful to call you a friend. Your kind words mean so much. Even if you were our only reader, I’d finish it just for you!!! I love you much–you know this, right??

    Thanks to all the ladies here at RA for keeping our Fanfic TBR lists full. I’m anxiously awaiting the completion of PR so I can start reading again.

    For those of you who are waiting for the completion of PR… it’s winding down. We hope to click the complete button in January or February.

    I am currently in the middle of the boonies with my hubs family, so my internet access is limited. I will try to get back on here and answer your comments today, but please don’t be offended if I don’t get to respond until tomorrow. I’m currently having to stand in my SILs kitchen with her laptop balanced on the edge of the counter because their service here SUCKS! If i make it to Macon, I’ll try to pop in a Starbucks with wifi and check in again. *winks*

    Thanks again, sweets!!!!

    When I get back in the “normal” world with good coverage, I’ll check back with you guys!

  7. I was sitting here at lunch reviewing all my usual sites and was floored by Cared’s review! Of all the of the thousands of stories she’s read, I am so completely humbled that she would select Pure Revelations to review on RobAttack. She found us very early on and has been with us for this wild ride offering lots of helpful assessments and advice. I hope so much to be able to meet her, gingerandgreen and so many others this summer.
    Wow! You really made my week (I would say my month, but RPattz took the crown last week).
    Thanks so much!
    Carolanne (georgiaedwardlover)

    • You two wrote such a great fic together it inspired me and Rita to team up and do the same. I hope we can live up to your awesome reputation as a co-writing team. Your story has been an inspation to many Me icluded. Thanks to you both for writing it.
      And thanks for stopping by to leave a comment. I hope you will com back some time to perv over the pretty with us!

      • Thanks so much! Deanna and I have been friends for 17 years. She and her husband actually introduced my husband and me. This story itself has been incredibly entertaining to weave. We are two very headstrong individuals and it has tested the limits of our patience many times, but it has been totally worth it. An unexpected perk has been the relationships we’ve formed with so many of our reviewers. It’s been a lot of fun to read what they’ve written and what they are reading. It’s also been just (i don’t have a word to describe the sensation) to drool on all those pervalicious pictures you post of The Precious. Thanks for that and all this attention !

  8. kalaekalae

    Great idea and a great post… thank you MC

  9. Hello Ladies!

    OMG – Cared, awesome rec. You do a beautiful job of recommending stories, bb 🙂 I am embarrassed to admit, I am behind on my Pure Revelations chapters, but this is on my “to do” list for this weekend. I really love this story too, Edward is pretty fabulous in this one – I just love his thought processes.

    The first thing I have to say is I LOVE a good angsty fic – as long as I get my HEA, of course. A few weeks ago MC rec’d a story called It Isn’t Over Yet by reyes139, so thanks to MC to getting me addicted to my latest “drug of choice”! The storyline intrigued me and I started it, and if there is a story that ever deserved it’s angst rating, it is this one. I was sobbing by the second chapter and I think that went on for a while. Now I am twitching in my seat for updates. I don’t think I have looked forward to finding out where an author is taking a story as much as this one for a long time. The author has promised a HEA. I love love to hear anyones else’s thoughts who is reading this story.. *WIP*

    The other story I have been reading this week is called Captive by totteacher This story is complete, but I am about three quarters the way through and I am loving it! I don’t read a whole lot of Vamp fics, but this one is great. Good twist on Canon and it is nice and juicy, lemon wise 🙂 Summary: Bella is kidnapped only to find herself in an unground Empire of Vampires. Her only chance to survive is to be chosen by the Dark Prince as his offerring, submiting herself to an unknown future against her will, the only other option is death.

    I hope everyone is having a great weekend! AV oxo

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